Tassen Spellbinder

Beautiful poem. The only real suggestion I have would be to break your first stanza after 'body, so it reads like this' Blind me, Love Take my breath Stay the ...

Hello, Red_Helix7! Tassen Spellbinder here to review your work! First of all, I think your rhyme scheme, if anything, detracts from the poem. In some places, it sounds rather forced. ...

I like how you tried to write this poem to be flowing, but I really think you should use some more punctuation. At the very least, I would end each ...

Hello, Forestqueen! Tassen Spellbinder here to review your work! Let's jump right in! "Why do I wait all day, Only to back out?" -- I don't think you need the ...

Hello, Lottyyy! Tassen Spellbinder here to review your poem! The first thing I noticed was "forehead craters like the gleaming moon which we gaze from different shores," -- I think ...

Hello, Kamas! Tassen Spellbinder here to have a look at your poem! I'm going to just copy-paste the lines that I saw things in, and go from there. Misleading causes ...

'ello, Biffle! Tassen Spellbinder here to review your piece! "My eyes burst open, the light searing them. Sarah is next to me on the opaque hospital seats. There is a ...

Hello, KnightlyAngel, Tassen Spellbinder here to review your poems! "The soil you dig reveals no trace, Of the buried, vanished, handsome face." -- I really think that the comma after ...

Tassen Spellbinder here with feedback on your poetry. Lauren, I think they sound just fine. I would like to nitpick at a few things, however. "I sink deeper into the ...

Hello, Crescent. Tassen Spellbinder here to review your poem. "Goblins dancing in the air, singing songs full of despair." -- If you could find a way to make that not ...

Hello, hidden. (I can see you. Sorry, couldn't resist.) Anyway, Tassen Spellbinder here to review your poem. I'm going to do this line by line, so here we go. "Lighting," ...

Hello, TenYo. Tassen Spellbinder here to review your poem. The first thing I noticed was in the third stanza. "The bombs will be sent into the sky for the worlds ...

'ello, Jagged. Tassen Spellbinder here to nit-pick at your poem. And what an interesting poem it is. First, I think you might want to point out what the The Kübler-Ross ...

Hello, Bailey Holcomb. Tassen Spellbinder here to review your poem. First, can I just point out that your avatar is epic? Totally unrelated, but it's epic. Moving on, then. The ...

Hello! Tassen Spellbinder here to nit-pick at your poem! Actually, there's not a lot I have to nit-pick about. "but I regret all my life mistakes" -- I would make ...